XwaynecoltX's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[11 Second Club]

Artsy

~~REVIEW~~
First of all the art on this is pretty good, it has an artsy type, good old style colors also help and make it more unique in that way thats why i like this one so props to you on that, it was well made too, allthough i thought it could have had some more effort in being slightly longer and such but for the most part it was entertaing so keep up the good work.

~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
More longer with a few more character changes wouldnt hur, for the mostpart it was alright

~~OVERALL~~
Entertaining i enjoyed it very much

Lotl responds:

Well I was restricted with length. The audio clip is 11 seconds, and the animation had to match for the assignment.
But thank you for your review.

[Slaughterhouse 5 intro]

Could be longer

~~REVIEW~~
Hmm well to start off this was interesting, its an intro ofcourse but it was kinda neat, but still too short thought you could have added much more then that, maybe have the title have more animation or go more into it with some character details and such so that it shows more on what to expect on the stuff that is presented in the full version, just a thought though but from what i see , its pretty good i thought, just abit on the shortside for me, anyways good luck on any more stuff in the future

~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
As i mentioned how about longer showing more characters of the full version, and more animated effects like with the title or something

~~OVERALL~~
short intro but gets to the point

~X~

falling responds:

Of course I could have added more bells and whistles, but what can't you recommend that for? As for the length, I was asked to create something around 15 seconds. As you can see I actually went over that time. More characters would have been a good addition though. Thank you.

[Pumpkin Dissection]

kinda short

~~REVIEW~~
LOL well i wont lie this was very cute and i got a good laugh out of it, it was kinda short, the pumnkin idea was neat but thios could have been slightly better if abit longer and showing that the kid did get to cut it, also your flash {LOOPS} you may want to add a stop action code at the start of your {TIMELINE} so it doesnt loop, and if your gonna have short flashes why not add a number of short ones and put them in here so that its not so short just an idea though, anyways good luck on your next one.

~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
Well a few things could really be worked on, first off adding a stop action code, adding more to the story, and or adding other short animations to go with.

~~OVERALL~~
Abit on the short side but still cute, i enjoyed it.
~X~

Mukki responds:

(: Thanks! I'm not sure how to put a preloader in so if I ever do learn, i'll make sure add it in this one and other future submissions.

[Kitten with guns animated]

that was cute

~~REVIEW~~
Ok so that was pretty entertaining kinda cute, but it was way too short i thought, the Audio was cute and seemed to fit right in, but it was too short but again also cute and very entertaining, the artwork and animation was pretty good, you probably could use more animations though make it longer and more audio with much more differant scenes would be nice, now these are just a few ideas that could improve on this, something to try out, but for the mostpart it was ok with me and entertaining.

~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
As explained could be longer more scenes, more audio and more stuff all around.

~~OVERALL~~
entertaining short here
~X~

JBTheAnimator responds:

The animation is done over a video from witch I saw on Youtube.
And youtube vids tend to be very short.
But I liked this one so I thought I should make an animation out of it.
I made it very fast and didn't want to spend a lot of time on it.
I could have added some of my own comedy in it but,
too lazy I guess.
But anyway thanx for the advice. :3

[Duality Complete]

Very short but i liked it.

~~REVIEW~~
Wow this starts off really crazy, didnt like that it didnt have a Play button, and it loops, gues it doesnt really need a preloader and all since, it was so very {SHORT] it was {AMAZING} though the animation itself was very impressive with good motion and loved the characters and great drawings you had in there, wish there was more color to it though, as it was just all black and white, you did have some and that was cool, but wouldnt mind abit more, ok so here comes a few suggestions for {IMPROVING} lets start off with the looping, now you could ad a stop-action code, to fix that, and also making it longer with more of the world to show aswell as more characters and more scenes all around would be another tip of improvment, the main thing for me is the loopings an easy fix as i did explain above and soon below, but anyways for what it was, it was very smooth and entertaining but just wish there was much more to it as it was very short but very intriging. anyways nice flash animation you have here.

~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
Well as said before, it does need to be longer and have much more content, what you had was awsome, so dont hold back and show us even more of that world, Try and fix that loop, this is an easy provess with some simple action script code, its called a "STOP-ACTION-CODE" now you will also have to add a stop and replay buttons so that the viewer can easily replay you flash aswell, abit more color wouldnt hurt either, i like what you did with the flower but maybe have a character in color with everything else in black and white, anyways here are a few tips hope they help.

~~OVERALL~~
A refreshing black and white flash very intriging, but way too short.

~X~

Weenog responds:

The problem is this isn't a flash at all but hand drawn, thats the reason its so short, why there's no preloader or stop function...
It's converted it from an mp4 and don't actualy own flash....yet.
Also i noticed from your reviews that you enjoy lots of colour, but the black and white theme was relevant in this short.

Anyway, thanks for the review.

[<blank> (0m41s)]

Needs more content

~~REVIEW~~
Hmm well i thouoght this was way too "SHORT" the music was really nice and pleasent and it seemed to fit what was going on with the visuals, but again i felt it was just too short and seems like you could have put the effort fourth and really made this into something awsome more then what it is, dont get me wrong its pretty impressive even as short as it may be, by adding more content and more of a story with "BLANK" in mind you started it off great with these odd characters and such, but again just short lived and too short, now as it is black and white thats pretty cool, i think you could have added abit of "COLOR" even if just a touch, so with all that said, things that could make this better are ofcourse more "CONTENT" more of a story, abit longer if you will, and then some color not alot as to take away from the Black and white style but something that has just a touch of color, so all and all i did enjoy this, it was just too short, and needed abit more ump to it, good luck on your next entry.

~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
so adding more content and more of a story is a plus, but also Black and white flashes are notbad, but while its black and white, you Should add some color even if just a drop of red or blue here and there, like say a blood drop so that the Black and White reflects more it would be a nice, and would standout abit better, and improving on your Black and White animation, anyways good luck

~~OVERALL~~
A very short flash, could have been much better, but it is decent for what it is.

~X~

Surn responds:

I guess the main thing was that I was itching to choreograph the song. It goes without saying that if you choreograph a short song your production will be short. Even so it's still a good point that I should try to look on (nobody would rather eat a fun size chocolate bar). As for the content and color: content/plot would have been difficult (but not impossible) add yet the color would indeed make it look better but it would have needed more than "just a touch".

So to recap I need to:
- Make it longer
- Use color
- Use plot (though I might be able to get away without it [see:ANIMUTATION])
- Overall try harder

Thanks for your help, I appreciate it.