XwaynecoltX's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Shaolin Master]

Needs some fixing up.

~~REVIEW~~
Well first off i thought this was way too short, you need to add much more content, more chacahters and much more color aswell as better visuals, and second you should probably ad a "STOP-ACTION-CODE" so those are the main things that need some work as for the animation itself, its notbad of an idea, kinda cute if you ask me and you have a good idea but like i said the visuals could be better, and more detail in the characters and effects aswell, so really this is ok but needs much more effort and detail on the animation, some ideas to improve on would be instead of the "LINES" as characters give them more full body types and have them animated abit smoother it seemed choppy at times, making it longer with other scenes other characters and much more use of color will also help, these are just a few ideas that could improve on this, try them out and see what you come up with.. but like i said it needs lots of ideas and improving, wont hurt to try.

~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
So i mentioned a few things to improve on, I would suggest to improve on the flash short you could add more shorts and put them all on one flash instead of just the one, but having alot in one flash would make it more entertaining, and make the flash longer with more to see, So more is needed, if not making it a short, make it filled with much more then you have, this movie "LOOPS" now thats actually an easy fix, you can use a stop-action-code from the action - script and there are actually lots of easy to understand tutorials here on the site to view on how this is done if you dont know, but anyways the stop-action-code will stop the looping, but dont forget to add some "PLAY" and "REPLAY" buttons for the viewers to restart viwing the flash, so these are just a few tips on improving on this i hope its helpful for your next creation.

~~OVERALL~~
A very short flash but can be improved, kinda funny idea i liked, of what was there.

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[Kevin Rudd:RAI493+D 004]

Hmm abit long

~~REVIEW~~
Hmm well these are just like the adolf series and not much to them, they need some sprucing up like, maybe some animation and such, it just doesnt have enough, maybe some fire animation for this ones, but still needs some more stuff.

~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
ad some animation have charmandor do something like jumping around and such

~~OVERALL~~
Not much going on here but it is what it is.

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[Neji Vs Orochimaru(demo)]

Too sgort but was notbad.

~~REVIEW~~
Ok so first off this is notbad at all, i really like it, and while it didnt "SCORE" very well it was a good start and better that its your first works, As for the "PLAY" screen you had the play button there with no real logo so if anything is suggested you should present a logo of your flash, also the "VIEW-SCREEN" seemed abit small, make it larger with some more platforms so they are like jumping and fighting all around, will have more visuals of alot of stuff going on, just an idea to work on. Ad More "EFFECTS" like with the backround scene, you could ad some running water for the waterfall or something, and when they are fighting you could have some more "BLASTS" that jump out making really fancy making the whole flash dazzle, just another idea that will improve on this, try it out, The flas seemed "SHORT" so make it longer with more characters maybe even more scenes not just the same one, just really go all out on this battle and have them go differant scenes, So i enjoyed this little flash of yours but it could use some improving as explained above, anyways good job, hope to see improved versions sometime.

~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
Adding a logo at the play menu screen would be a start, a larger viewscreen, more scenes and most of all more widespread effects.

~~OVERALL~~
A good battle seemed too short though.

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Shikhs responds:

i made a mightier version of this flash about 2 mins long and with a lot of special effects v-cam and all but i lost the pen drive which contained it.if i can find it i will give all the newgrounders a visual treat.Anyways thanks for the review

[Cooking Napalm with Nick]

Entertaining flash

~~REVIEW~~
This was funny, the onlything i dont like about this was the small buttons infact i dont like the butons at all you should make it so its more like a movie. let it flow, as the buttons just slow down the whole idea and flow of the flash you have here, so remove the buttons and make it more like a movie and it will look better and just be an overall better presentation.

~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
Remove the buttons so it flows like a movie more, more explanation above.

~~OVERALL~~
needs some fixing but is ok for what it is

[Hirby the snake]

Good but needs improving

~~REVIEW~~
Ok first off, good job on your first try at this, you do have some skills so welcome to the portal, now as for the art work its notbad, and not sure which program you are using but i do think that there is lacking some quality in the artwork, it alsmost looks like its from ms paint, a more better program might be paintshop pro to edot your artwork then back into the flash program now you have put the effort and the animation is ok but at times it seems too slow, so speed up the animation abit, and again ad those subtitles it will greatly help to flow along with your story here, the whole animation was pretty cute, but i thought, it was way too short and more material and content should be added, you do have something with the story but you need to vring all these elements together to make it all flow well together, so i stated a few tips here and there and i hope to see more of your work improved ofcourse, so hope your next entry is much better good luck on your future stuff.

~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
The prom you use for editing art can make a big differance something to think about there, also some "SUBTITLES" could be used,

~~OVERALL~~
Cute but abit on the short side.

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blackriversidewolf responds:

Thank you very much i did spend alot of time on this flash and yes i know it is alot shorter then i would have liked but i value your opinion LOL the art work was orgianally drawn on a peice of paper then scanned and then painted usind ms paint ....... i will have to exsperiment with photo shop more ... and as for sub title i fully agree in using them next time thank you very very much for your review and your critism is greatly appreciated and i will most def take what you have said into effect and exspirement around much more

[Theatre Tool]

Brilliant all the way to the end

~~REVIEW~~
LOL Ok first off great "PLAY" button and its after effects haha that was brilliant so props to you there for an awsome idea, and second you get more props because the characters were very welldone and you gave them there own personality and humor, the whole flash was pretty funny i thought, allthough it seemed too short, except for the "END" damn that was not expected at all but ill give you props for even that lil end aswell heh now i will have a differant view of any movie experience :( hah j/k it was a welldone flash with lots of laughter, very entertaining scnes, but again it should be longer with more content and such, Now if i could suggest a few things, maybe you could ad more content, some more differant scenes, the ending was a blast heh, anyways nice job indeed.

~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
ad more content, more differant scenes and try and make it longer if you can.

~~OVERALL~~
Funny and short but good entertainment.

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JunkYardAnimations responds:

haha awesome thanks dude! i definitely have some longer flashes in store!

[SuperNova HeadTrip]

Fantastic

~~REVIEW~~
A fantasic asortmant of visuals, kinda neat, some areas were bland. like you shoould have added some effects in the backrounds aswell, also i would like to see more colors, not just here and there but all over and like i said earlier more backround effort is needed, more detail and just more effort when it comes to backrounds and such, good luck though.

~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
Add more effects in the backrounds aswell and ad more colors all around along with some nifty effects to go with all that.

~~OVERALL~~
fun and entertaining to see but does need a few improvments

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[Jackson B and the scooter]

Nice and cute

~~REVIEW~~
I thought this was a nice little and cute flash, good design of the "CHARACTER" good animating and good art and backrounds, only problem i really had with it was that it was abit slow getting to the end. so maybe thats the problem with-in the story so maybe speed it up there cut a few parts here and there and there you go a much better preentation, which in the end will sufice. so good luck.

~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
Speed up the story just abit, other then that it was notbad at all

~~OVERALL~~
good storry but seems to drag on

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