So this was an alright entry here, kinda neat the way it starts off and such, not what i had expected at first but still pretty interesting. there may be a few things you could change but thats for later. This starts off pretty decent i thought, and you even change it up somewhat, i like the build up it does have. this seems pretty nifty and i can see it being used in a lot of different situations. And here i am at the ending of this review but not before i mention that i liked your effort here and liked the kind of vibe this gave off, and hope you make more stuff like this in the near future.
~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
OK so first of all before i get to some improvments, i did like this and was a good piece, maybe you can improve on this though, i have a few suggestions and hope you think on a few even one as they should and will help for the overall improvment of things. So you had some nice build up in this one, maybe somewhere you can build the build up even stronger, since i felt it was not enough.