XwaynecoltX's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Vintage Voicemail 2]

Amusing

~~REVIEW~~
First of all, nice loader page, still has the "GREEN" touch you always like to go with and that i liked, and it had something that would have been related to the flash, like the cell-phone. so nice touch there, Now i must admitt that this was pretty short, so wont be easy on my to review but i will do my best, so it did make me laugh, and the "AUDIO" was pretty funny and amusing, the guy in the backround jumping around was funny and somewhat random so nice job there, the backround scene was notbad and showed some good effort all around, but i feel that if you took the flash into other and new scenes, like maybe the guy is walking around, throughout the house, while the bouncing guy behind fallowed him, might give it that extra bit humor, aswell as making it somewhat longer, so its just an idea, but might work, either in this or a later version and or update, But anyways i had a fun time with this, you should make more , but try and make em longer if you can.

~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
Have more scenes in it, like him walking around aswell as the bouncing guy, also not really a major thing but the lip animation didnt exactly match up with the audio but i also understand how that can also be a pain so not a big thing.

~~OVERALL~~
So overall it was short, but still was amusing.

~X~

[ANAL FURY LOLICON HENTAI]

amusing

~~REVIEW~~
LOL ok so i started this and it had a small little animation which is notbad, you have some cute characters and really good use of color so it all seemed to pay off, and then pops up the play button so it can only get better from here which i like, Ok so the first one to click on was a fould language word that was interesting, So after viewing them all these were all somewhat entertaining but too much flashing, i think you should do more on like what the intro was as that was abit more entertaining.

~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
More of a story more animation but with less of the flashing

~~OVERALL~~
Silly short clips with too much flashing.

~X~

[Shaolin Master]

Needs some fixing up.

~~REVIEW~~
Well first off i thought this was way too short, you need to add much more content, more chacahters and much more color aswell as better visuals, and second you should probably ad a "STOP-ACTION-CODE" so those are the main things that need some work as for the animation itself, its notbad of an idea, kinda cute if you ask me and you have a good idea but like i said the visuals could be better, and more detail in the characters and effects aswell, so really this is ok but needs much more effort and detail on the animation, some ideas to improve on would be instead of the "LINES" as characters give them more full body types and have them animated abit smoother it seemed choppy at times, making it longer with other scenes other characters and much more use of color will also help, these are just a few ideas that could improve on this, try them out and see what you come up with.. but like i said it needs lots of ideas and improving, wont hurt to try.

~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
So i mentioned a few things to improve on, I would suggest to improve on the flash short you could add more shorts and put them all on one flash instead of just the one, but having alot in one flash would make it more entertaining, and make the flash longer with more to see, So more is needed, if not making it a short, make it filled with much more then you have, this movie "LOOPS" now thats actually an easy fix, you can use a stop-action-code from the action - script and there are actually lots of easy to understand tutorials here on the site to view on how this is done if you dont know, but anyways the stop-action-code will stop the looping, but dont forget to add some "PLAY" and "REPLAY" buttons for the viewers to restart viwing the flash, so these are just a few tips on improving on this i hope its helpful for your next creation.

~~OVERALL~~
A very short flash but can be improved, kinda funny idea i liked, of what was there.

~X~

[Kevin Rudd:RAI493+D 004]

Hmm abit long

~~REVIEW~~
Hmm well these are just like the adolf series and not much to them, they need some sprucing up like, maybe some animation and such, it just doesnt have enough, maybe some fire animation for this ones, but still needs some more stuff.

~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
ad some animation have charmandor do something like jumping around and such

~~OVERALL~~
Not much going on here but it is what it is.

~X~

[Neji Vs Orochimaru(demo)]

Too sgort but was notbad.

~~REVIEW~~
Ok so first off this is notbad at all, i really like it, and while it didnt "SCORE" very well it was a good start and better that its your first works, As for the "PLAY" screen you had the play button there with no real logo so if anything is suggested you should present a logo of your flash, also the "VIEW-SCREEN" seemed abit small, make it larger with some more platforms so they are like jumping and fighting all around, will have more visuals of alot of stuff going on, just an idea to work on. Ad More "EFFECTS" like with the backround scene, you could ad some running water for the waterfall or something, and when they are fighting you could have some more "BLASTS" that jump out making really fancy making the whole flash dazzle, just another idea that will improve on this, try it out, The flas seemed "SHORT" so make it longer with more characters maybe even more scenes not just the same one, just really go all out on this battle and have them go differant scenes, So i enjoyed this little flash of yours but it could use some improving as explained above, anyways good job, hope to see improved versions sometime.

~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
Adding a logo at the play menu screen would be a start, a larger viewscreen, more scenes and most of all more widespread effects.

~~OVERALL~~
A good battle seemed too short though.

~X~

Shikhs responds:

i made a mightier version of this flash about 2 mins long and with a lot of special effects v-cam and all but i lost the pen drive which contained it.if i can find it i will give all the newgrounders a visual treat.Anyways thanks for the review

[Cooking Napalm with Nick]

Entertaining flash

~~REVIEW~~
This was funny, the onlything i dont like about this was the small buttons infact i dont like the butons at all you should make it so its more like a movie. let it flow, as the buttons just slow down the whole idea and flow of the flash you have here, so remove the buttons and make it more like a movie and it will look better and just be an overall better presentation.

~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
Remove the buttons so it flows like a movie more, more explanation above.

~~OVERALL~~
needs some fixing but is ok for what it is

[Hirby the snake]

Good but needs improving

~~REVIEW~~
Ok first off, good job on your first try at this, you do have some skills so welcome to the portal, now as for the art work its notbad, and not sure which program you are using but i do think that there is lacking some quality in the artwork, it alsmost looks like its from ms paint, a more better program might be paintshop pro to edot your artwork then back into the flash program now you have put the effort and the animation is ok but at times it seems too slow, so speed up the animation abit, and again ad those subtitles it will greatly help to flow along with your story here, the whole animation was pretty cute, but i thought, it was way too short and more material and content should be added, you do have something with the story but you need to vring all these elements together to make it all flow well together, so i stated a few tips here and there and i hope to see more of your work improved ofcourse, so hope your next entry is much better good luck on your future stuff.

~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
The prom you use for editing art can make a big differance something to think about there, also some "SUBTITLES" could be used,

~~OVERALL~~
Cute but abit on the short side.

~X~

blackriversidewolf responds:

Thank you very much i did spend alot of time on this flash and yes i know it is alot shorter then i would have liked but i value your opinion LOL the art work was orgianally drawn on a peice of paper then scanned and then painted usind ms paint ....... i will have to exsperiment with photo shop more ... and as for sub title i fully agree in using them next time thank you very very much for your review and your critism is greatly appreciated and i will most def take what you have said into effect and exspirement around much more