Nice start
Hmm this was nice, also has a nice start to it, kinda reminds me of thriller at the start but anyways its a good tune, has a nuice feel and plays along very well, it was not too long and not too short but actually just right, i did think the drums plays too much, you need to shorten the drums abit and or add more of a build up in there, i like the voices in the backround that gave it some depth and variaty, but anyways this was pretty nifty tune hope to hear more of your work, but anyways good effort here, try and improve on the drums abit.
~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
so as above the drums play on too long with no build up, try adding some build up or something with more tempo changes in the tune.