Hmmm notbad
so this was notbad, i like the sound you gave this, allthough could use some more mix and variaty of other sounds aswell, also wouldnt mind hearing some pipes in there and ofcourse a much better build up then what you had, some pipe sounds might bring in that mix in there, but for the mostpart it was pretty interesting, didnt have much of an umpp ump, so could use more variaty and mix of differant sounds to push the quality up abit, but that was about it, It was pretty long but again it was pretty decent and i enjoyed this piece and look forward to more of what you have in store for us.
~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
So for improving on this Music piece here is a suggestion or two, hope it helps. your piece is notbad but could use some extras give it a try., didnt have much of an umpp ump, so could use more variaty and mix of differant sounds to push the quality up abit, So while this was a pretty good tune as is, it could use some more effects like in the backround, some odd or even unique sounds wouldnt hurt, even play with the options on the sound program you use, such as some echoing, some tempo beats that fade here and there, just play with some of the effects abit, will give the the tune some good quality too it. Try adding something differant like differant instraments and even other odd and unique sounds to add to what you already have making something more intense and differant.