((( HMMM OK )))
Well it could work, just needs abit more detail, i like how you have there line drawn arms stretching out, and there mouth stretching to gobble the other up, to improve i could say add more sounds, maybe some music, some backrounds like trees, boulders and so-on, well it was ok frame by frame, hope it helps...
MOVIE COMMENTARY: Frame by frame action...
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